Thursday, June 20, 2013

Mr. Montes and Mrs. Banks: v. 1.1

Okay,  First off, ignore all that stuff I said about updating once a week.  It was probably just a pipe dream.  In the very least, it is obviously untrue.  I could try and justify it, but I am not sure there is a point.  I will do my best, but sometimes you forget new things, and sometimes, you don't feel up to it.  Whatever the reason, It obviously isn't happening, and I will update when I can.

With that in mind,  here is the first look at Mr. Montes and Mrs. Banks.

First let me say that from here on out,  These characters are completely fictional and anything they may have in common with actual people is entirely coincidental.  I know I mentioned Ryan from LSSU and Sarah from Pizza Hut, but these are people I haven't had real interaction with for nearly (in the case of Ryan (and I don't even know which Ryan it is)) and over (in the case of Sarah from Pizza Hut) a decade. Further people's behaviors in dreams are rarely like their behavior in real life, so I think I am going to go on a naming kick today.

The main character was me in the dream, but we are going to give him the working name of Joshua.  It will probably change, but that is as good as anything right now.

Amy is the significant other of the main character, so we are going to change her to Jordyce.

Mr. Montes and Mrs. Banks are staying the same because my subconscious named them that for a reason!

For some reason Leslie just popped in there for the name of the nymphomaniac.

Professor Moody was apparently a D.J.  It doesn't say what he said on the radio or even what kind of station it was so we are going to completely throw that out for now.  If it works into the story later than we can figure out what is appropriate then.  It doesn't really seem to play any sort of significant part in the story and was just an aside because I was writing out my dream.  If it comes up later, we will come up with something later.

Maybe I could have a radio announcer be the narrator.  I know it has been doen before, but lets see what happens if anything.

Next time:  The setting.

Saturday, May 25, 2013

Mr. Montes and Mrs Banks



 I was going to wait a bit to post this, but since my dear wife is popular on facebook and asked people to come look, I figured I would post my first story idea.  It is my favorite.  I may try and streamline it a bit before I post the next story idea or I may go with the original plan and post all the ideas first before I do any editing.  I haven't decided yet.

Without further ado, I give you the very very rough story or Mr. Montes and Mrs. Banks. (Montes is pronounced mon-tays)

I had tried going to the store late on the day before Thanksgiving. There, I met up with the closing crew from K-Mart - all people I knew, but none were from K-Mart - Ryan from LSSU, Sarah from Pizza Hut, and another girl from Pizza Hut.

Anyway there, talking with them, I met the nymphomaniac. After she ran amok a bit, I convinced the teacher to let me photograph the nympho.  I had to seduce her to do it. She agreed and we took nympho to a mental hospital so we didn't have to keep and eye on her. When we get there, we are helped by a very nice grandmotherly woman. Me and Amy - after stowing our nympho go exploring.

We come across a door with the lock on the outside - odd because all the other doors are normal. Amy opens the door and inside is a black female midget. She acts normal for about two seconds then she rushes out into the hall and starts grabbing at the teething rings I was playing with. We ascertain that her name is Mrs. Banks and she is getting the rings for Mr. Montes.

She is going nuts and it takes me and Amy both to subdue her and get her back into the room. Then, Professor Moody comes on the radio. I start cleaning up the mess while Amy goes to get the nice old lady on duty. While we clean up, we make small talk with the old lady mention Moody and Lake State where we met.

At about this point, the nice old lady opens the door and lets Mrs. Banks out. Ahe has to verify out story. After she lets out Mrs. Banks, she can no longer control herself. While Mrs. Banks attacks Amy, I work on getting the rings away from the old lady. I wrestle with her and the rings gradually into the apartment. Once we get in, the old lady springs upon me and starts strangling me.  I ask what's going on and with a glimmer in her eye, She informs me that she is Mr. Montes. As I start to black out (gasping Amy's name, but she doesn't seem to notice), I wonder what this pair did to the real orderly.

Testing One Two

Okay, I had an idea.  I don't know if it is a good idea, but I am going to give it a shot.  I have a few stories floating around in my head.  They have mostly come from dreams I have had. As a result, they are very short and don't necessarily make any sense.  So, here is what I am going to do.  I am going to try and write some stories in a completely open way.  I am going to post the rough draft that started it and I am going to do all the edits on the blog here in the open.  I don't know if anything will ever come of this.  Only time will tell.  I welcome all comments, but a comment of pure negativity won't see the light of day. Keep in mind, that since this is completely open, the whole blog is basically spoilers.

One more thing. I will use comments in the story.  If you make any comment, suggestion, anything like that, you are relinquishing any rights to that idea to me personally. This may someday turn into a novel or kindle book or something like that and I don't want to deal with any nonsense like that.  If I use a comment, and it does turn into something that makes me money, you will be mentioned on an acknowledgements page. The acknowledgement will be listed however the comment is signed. If it is signed by fartmonkey123, than fartmonkey123 will be mentioned on the acknowledgements page. If you posted anonymously you will be listed as one of x anonymous contributors. If you want your actual name in the hypothetical book, you have to put your actual name.  No argument to change a name will be accepted.

If I never get any comments, my feelings won't be hurt too bad.  This is really for me, but it would be nice to have others help make this something great.

I am going to try an post once a week.  I may increase that some day, but I want to give myself a goal I think I can keep up with.  My first posts will be the rough draft of the story concepts (I think I have three right now) Once they are all up, I will start editing and expanding. 

Let's see what this test will bring.